Once there was a little girl named Ella she is very shy and she doesn't have many friends. One day she had found a red balloon tied up to a lamppost and she was going to take it home to her mum. So she took it as she was walking home and it started to get very windy and the red balloon flew away so she chased it until it got stuck in a tree. She climbed the tree and got it as she was walking home. She went past this graveyard and she went to look in the graveyard to see if anything was there. As she was walking past she saw her name on a tombstone and she found out she was dead.
Hello Mayci!
ReplyDeleteThis piece of writing is quite dark I should say, But I like it.
Maybe next time try adding a little more detail?
And how did you come up with this idea?
Overall, great Job!
-Sofiya
Kia Ora, Mayci
ReplyDeleteI love your writing.
It has a bit of a dark tone to it though.
Maybe next time you could explain how she died, or why.
but overall its great.
Have a good one Mayc.
Hi Mayci!
ReplyDeleteI love your story, and I really enjoyed
the ending as it was very dark and I love dark stories!
Maybe next time you could add a blurb why you wrote this.
Again I really enjoyed reading this!
What is the backstory, like how did she die etc.
Overall you a great job!
I hope you have a good day! Bye!
-Tiare
Kia Ora Mayci
ReplyDeleteI really like your story especially at the end when it said that she was dead. Next time you could add a blurb. Why did you do this story?
Kind Regards Caitlin